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Post by foolishheart on Aug 3, 2008 12:30:15 GMT -5
I rest in a sultry sky hot and moonlight kissed I splash my feet in cool water just for the refreshment of bliss. I like my lemon tea cold and sweet.
My barren womb is battering me it's been screaming for days on end saying something is the matter with me as if I had a choice. Chilly now, the wind's picked up.
The night is clear and bright with a million possibilities hanging in the sky each one becomming starlight no one knows if they've already died. Oh, the possibilities of Autumn. The fish are feeding now... I see the lees.
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Post by annbkeller on Aug 7, 2008 4:46:56 GMT -5
Very nice.
May I ask a question, though? "I see the lees." What are those?
Ann B. Keller
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Post by foolishheart on Aug 11, 2008 15:32:53 GMT -5
Hi Anna, the lees are the ripples on the surface of the water. foolishheart
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Post by Deborah on Aug 15, 2008 10:24:26 GMT -5
Great word choice there!
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Post by shelleya on Aug 15, 2008 15:09:49 GMT -5
A very nice write. Heartfelt. Lovely depth of feeling. Good imagery, flow and tone. Good word choice, alliteration and nice assonance. Vivid descriptives. A much enjoyed read.
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